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Floating where no one can See

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20 different laughs
                    and 20 different faces
          100 different thoughts
                    A millions different feelings

and "I" floats in the
          -=middle=-

where no one can know
                    and nobody will see
just how (shallow) I am,

                    and how much I
          (hate to) give up (anything)
                    to you


          But my hatred is (just) fear of
                              what I might lose;
          this hatred is afraid that
                              (a fearful thought;
                   "what will I get back")
                              my poor heart
                    (with it's reverberating pulse)
          won't be able to keep up
                                        (or return)          with
(all) the love I've
                              (been) given

and I don't want to let you down
and I don't want to fail
and I don't want to miss
                              (a moment with)

                                                                                                              you
ha ha!! thanks go to Kafteros-Okeanos for helping me w/ the title ^^


but the 2nd to last stanza isn't right... i know it's not right. but I haven't fixed it yet, I'd also like to hear any suggestions you have for that...


so yea... a guy at work told me i had like, 20 differents laughs, so that's the first line, and it just kinda grew from there... and by grow, i mean like a cancer; it's not necessarily a good thing : x


but yea, here we go...
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d1ssolvedgirl's avatar
This is great. The format is easy to read, flows well. It's sweet too. :D